You’re a fine writer. The narrative is coiled restraint and you have a gift for atmosphere. Life is a lot like baseball. Everything is anticipation, planning and countless scenarios but with very little action.
The action is in the mind. Your protagonist has the goods but desire and doubt make her glisten in the dim light of that bar.
Alright! In my limited knowledge of screenplay writing I would say that this scene beautifully set up the location, scene, a main character and a few others.
Who needs the movie? (just kidding. we all want the movie now)
Well done my friend. If I wasn't so old, my character would definitely ask her to come and see my etchings.
Hope you liked it, M. You should see my screenplays. My preferred genre is dark, psychological stuff. The script I’m currently pitching is a female-led, psychological thriller. My rants, by the way, are a result of my disgust with idiots and idiocracy, most notably, the abject morons and racists who support a treasonous, felonious pedophile. Thanks for reading.
You still have what it takes, my friend.
I broke out in a cold sweat.
Thank you, Rick. I'm sure the lovely Deb can take care of that.
You’re a fine writer. The narrative is coiled restraint and you have a gift for atmosphere. Life is a lot like baseball. Everything is anticipation, planning and countless scenarios but with very little action.
The action is in the mind. Your protagonist has the goods but desire and doubt make her glisten in the dim light of that bar.
Wow, Tim. That means a lot. Thanks very much. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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Alright! In my limited knowledge of screenplay writing I would say that this scene beautifully set up the location, scene, a main character and a few others.
Who needs the movie? (just kidding. we all want the movie now)
Well done my friend. If I wasn't so old, my character would definitely ask her to come and see my etchings.
A good read to start my afternoon!
💐💐🍸
Thank you, Jeff. It’s great to hear from you. I’m glad you like the story. There is a Part 1, by the way. I’m guessing you read Part 2.
This was different for you! I personally have been in your (fictional?) shoes, minus the martinis. I don't drink those.
Hope you liked it, M. You should see my screenplays. My preferred genre is dark, psychological stuff. The script I’m currently pitching is a female-led, psychological thriller. My rants, by the way, are a result of my disgust with idiots and idiocracy, most notably, the abject morons and racists who support a treasonous, felonious pedophile. Thanks for reading.